...but needs a bit of work.
I am in pretty much complete agreement with everything PenguinSam has already said. I will add a few things, though.
I want to first stress that the song sounds very empty. I really sounds bare and needs some stuff going on in the background to really sound nice. It's not bad, but it could make it alot better.
Also, I noticed (this could be just my preferences, but...) that alot of the sounds you used such as some of the synths and the drums sounded fairly cheesy. You may have done it on purpose, but stuff like that can bother me alot. Best advice on that would be to experiment and just pick sounds that "go best" together. I suppose it just takes alot of practice and experimenting.
So, that's pretty much it. Good luck in the contest. :)
well yea, i purposely made this song sound cheesy. I was just really trying to aim for that egyptian sound. I was looking through alot of the chord progression and motives that they use on the internet and It came out sounding like this. I don't normally do alot of techno, so i'm pretty inexperienced at it. I originally wanted to make a metal song, but i don't have any of my recording equipment.
You got something working for you!
I hear a LOT of potential in this song, it just has this really neat atmosphere going on.
Now, I do have a recommendation or two.
In the section that starts at about 1:07, the high frequency that moves up is a great addition. However, it would be better if as soon as it reaches its peak it were to come back down. It would really keep the momentum moving, which this could really use.
Through the section that starts at 2:17, the little "sparkles" that you add (sorry, I couldn't think of what else to call them) and fade out are quite nice as well. However, I think that to keep the momentum moving you should have the "sparkles" fade back in when they can't be heard so that we get this sort of continuous up and down motion.
Also, the song as a whole sounds very empty. You could really use just, well more meat to the texture of the piece. Most of the time you have one or two voices, so add more! A great way may be to emphasize the chord progression by, well, playing the chords! Maybe have some ominous strings or pad or something the chords, that would be nice. I mean, you just need to add more! In the parts where there are no drums, add some cymbals or something. Whatever it is, ADD MORE!!!
You really do have something good in the making, but it could be so much better! Do your best and good luck in the contest!
p.s. Yes, I am competing as well. ;)
hey thanks alot man. I was hearing the other songs in the competition and i realized i was WAAAyYY out of my league at making techno. YEah i should of done alot more to this song but i didn't really have alot of time to work on it. I kinda just threw it together in like 2 hours. I was looking around and i saw that other people worked on their pieces for days, and let me just say...totally badass material around.
Well thanks for the review brah.