Revisit and Improve
It's alright, but the intro is uninteresting. The main melody at 0:59 is really cool sounding though. The bass might be too overpowering with that loud saw wave synth. Work on smoothing out your transitions and add more dynamic patterns and melodies. This song isn't fluent, and doesn't have a sense of fulfillment when it ends. It has potential though. Keep it up!
thanks for input very helpful! The thing is I love bass. I love my speakers to explode. But yes it might be too overpowering for many.