I agree with the Enteroar , you need a harder kick,better clap..and needs a slower bpm..and oh yea stronger bass!
because if i ever did a good melo as this one, i would do an epic song over it :]
anyways, i kno , WIP so take ur time! even if it took months..DO SOMETHING NICE RATHER THAN DOING SHIT ;D 8/10 4/5
Btw..check my songs if u got time man :)
take care :]