So I wrote this in one day. Cool. I think that it gets better later in the song, because I think there's not enough bass for the melody to sit on in the first half. So if you could put up with listening it through that would be good.
Anyway, as I said, I wrote this in one day. It was very different in my head but I think it turned out alright. I will touch it up later. It needs to be a bit more dynamic, and some of the instruments need changing.
I'd love to hear from you, so please, review by all means!