Um... interesting instrument choice, there
Probably wouldn't have been my choice, but I won't hold that against you - personal taste is... well, personal, after all.
Some of the chippy sound is alright, but the quality is very inconsistent throughout. Sometimes the synths are thick and in your face, while at other times they're thin and restrained. A more consistent sound would help this track considerably.
Take down most of the portamento in your tracks and save them for special effect. They tend to muddy tracks, if not handled carefully.
It has potential, but it doesn't have a consistency that I can hold onto, right now. It needs work, but it isn't off to a terrible start, either.
Yeah, I'm still fairly new at making music and I'm really just feeling out the program still. I really appreciate the feedback. I'll definitely be trying to better my instrument selection as my work continues. I'll probably even come back and redo these older songs too once I figure it out.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.