Nothing too special yet...
I wasn't really that impressed with this submission. It'll probably sound much better rapped on (even if I don't like Rap myself), but I'm going to review it as it is now, not as it might be when rapped on, and to be brutally honest, as it is now I'm not really too impressed. Sure, it has some good things to it, but this still needs some work before it can be enjoyable to listen to.
The melody you used is really interesting. You used the same four notes, same rhythm, and same instrumen for a whole 2 and a half minutes. You'll have to see it as repetitive at one point or another. First things first: turn it up. It's really quiet as it is now, completely lost in an array of loud drums and random sound effects. Secondly, this melody is REALLY simple. Just a G, E, F and A playing in a simple rhythm. Sure, I understand that rap beats don't have some complicated melody, but at least give the melody a bit more catchiness. It's very bland and almost annoying as it is now. Finally, give it some more diversity. As I said, the melody is used for the whole song, when you had space for loads of alternate melodies, or subtle changes at the least. So, as a recap, vary the melody more, make the melody a little more catchy and less bland/simple, and turn it up a little...
The instrument you used was also pretty plain. It sounds like a cross between a raw square wave and a raw sine wave. No filtering, effects, or any other layers of different waves over the synth. Just a simple synth. I think you should make the synth sound a bit more interesting and add a few more background instruments to give the song a bit more depth. Maybe it's just me and my lack of knowledge of Rap, but I think this sounds really empty with just a drums playing over a very quiet and simple synth with a few sound effects. Speaking of the sound effects, I really liked them; I'm sure that if you rap over this, the sound effects will make it sound much more interesting. I also like the reverb you put on one of the claps; it added a cool effect to the beat.
The transitions aren't really that good. Sure, none of the transitions sounded so bad that they stood out, but none of the transitions were that special. Probably the worst transition would be the one you did when introducing the beat to the song. Give it some simple drum roll before starting it up, or maybe a reverse cymbal or something. The drums come in pretty suddenly and take the user by surprise; but maybe that has to do with the fact that the drums are so loud.
The structure is pretty weird, when comparing with other song structures I heard. You had the same melody playing, and sometimes the beat was playing, sometimes it wasn't, and you added a few sound effects here and there. Still, maybe it's the structure of a Rap song; as I said, I know very little about Rap. The variety, as I said, isn't that good, because of the repetitive beat, the repetitive melody and the lack of different sounds. The intro and outro were very uninteresting too. A fade in for the intro and a fade out for an outro, which don't provide such a good intro and ending.
The drums were good. The beat was definitely catchy, even though it held the same rhythm as any other rap beat there is. I think the hat got a bit annoying at times though, namely around 0:28. Still, the beat sounded nice overall, so good job over there. Samples were cool too. The only problem I have with them is obviously that they were so repetitive and that they were really loud too.
Overall, this is an OK submission, although without the rap lyrics, this sounds really plain because of its lack of different sounds and depth. The melody also needs some work since it's really basic, but at least the sound effects are awesome and the beat and drum samples you used were also great. So yeah, in general, an OK submission, but deifnitely could be improved more if it had the rap lyrics or at least some better melodies and more instruments. Still, not a bad job, good luck with your future songs!
5/5 - because this got 0-bombed :/.
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