It needs tweaks
It is really good! But at some points when all the synths come together you can hear that they all play loud and that the notes are at the same volume.
Therefore it lacks dynamics. Try to play with the volunme on each note imagine what notes would be played loud in the melody and which would be less loud.
Try to get a way from the standard very plain synth sounds.
You can make this richer in ambience.
All what i hear is good and full of talent. You can do better on the end mix and the ballance. The bassline is almost completely subdued.
Keep going you definately have talent!!!!
9/10 for melody and musicality 4/5
Please return the favor on my new song: Spanish way of life.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.