when you could smoke better!
Can't get on sum petty, I'm a yeti when i'm rippin' rhythm
local election people unsteady with their indecision
votein' for the oil guys heistin' us at "Pilot"
instead of revolutionaries ripe for startin' riots
Non-violent, all just picketing
Cops came out raised hell, start ticketing
Next came shields, plot keeps thickening
sonic sound the crowd and paralyze them with their listening
Hope it's not for 'pistol-ing' but really it is
they had a camera in the crowd when he shot the kid
Now on my end we wonderin' on how we gon' live
When any city could be taken with a federal bid
no backing, bending until cracking
Break the peoples bank accounts to give em' a shellacking
let em think it's better with what stimulus is packing
but it's supposed to be spent, how they keep enacting?
I think the fact brings a cold chill to my spine
a shrill yell from the people, "Save us from our minds,
bent upon each other as we take a nose-dive!"
I don't know bout you but I ain't votein' for the show guy
they keep inflating the bubble, but just to pop it again
Let me tell it better than a politician grin
And stab you right in your back
So in the end I write petitions but they never react.....
spit to it my man, you have my blessing
thats a good question
Nice beat right here.
...'cause there's nothing else in town.
Nice touch with the synth at 0:48. That's my favorite part.
Maybe you could give a little more attention to the strings. They are maybe a little overbearing and the melody is repetitive. That's nothing wrong with repetition, but then it shouldn't be so prominent but more an underlying theme. It's the bass that should do the talking (you're really good at bass lines), so it's a sound mixing thing. Change their roles and it's gonna' be way cooler.
One other little thing: I see what you intended with the hihat groove. I think you succeeded around 70%. Better quantisation maybe? (or maybe not, of course - just my 2 cents).
For now it's a 4/5 8/10 from me.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.