I read your comments, and basically you and I have the world in common with musical background.
My suggestion with this piece, work on EQ'ing it a little better. The synth strings seem a bit too loud. I'd also suggest different synths altogether, but that is more-so b/c I'm not a fan of the genre.
If the atmosphere from 1:08 - 1:35 was used more often, I'd probably really get into this piece. But I digress, good work, just needs a bit more work in the EQ'ing.