Umm...all i can say is that this isn't Hardstyle at all.
This has more of a Techno feel to it, not Hardstyle.
Hardstyle needs sharp synths, adrenaline pumping melodies, varied drum patterns including a hard sounding kick, and aggressive reverse basslines.
I'm not comparing your work to that of the professionals, but here are two songs you can listen to so you can get the Hardstyle feel:
"The Sacrifice" by Headhunterz
"Rock Civilization" by Headhunterz
I'm sorry this review sounded harsh, I don't mean to offend you by it.
I'm not offend ;) I need advice like that
thanks man !