The first thing i've composed in quite a while. It actually took me a lot less time than I thought it would to have something that i thought would be presentable, though this is still pretty rough. Any suggestions on how to improve upon what I have so far would be greatly appreciated. Constructive criticism is the best, but if this sucks, please tell me why and what I can do to fix it. Don't just tell me, "Hey ass-clown! You suck donkey balls!" Give me reasons why the song is terrible and tell me what to do to make it not terrible, if that makes any sense. Thanks y'all. Looking forward to any comments you may have!