nice :D!

when it all came together it was a great song... you definitely have some great musical chops... you know what sounds good..and what sounds right
nice pads... they gave the song an eerie atmosphere
suggestions:
1. your intro was a little lengthy... now that doesnt bother me but other viewers on the site have a should attention span :/
2. some of your ur breakdowns where a little legnthy....

breakdowns give u a fresh start in ur song.... you can add a ton to it... make it sound exotic compared to the rest... which i love about it(only tricky part is transitioning it back).... but anyways in a breakdown add new unfamiliar melody to the song...

props for automation! i used automation for the first time on revival my first track... hahaha... it makes the song alot of easier to transition and sounds pretty sick :D!
well i really enjoyed this piece! and pm me every time u upload a new piece... ill 5 it right away(help protect you from 0 bombers!)

hope to hear more from you!

Ehh,

First of all, well done on completing a piece!

This is going to be honest criticism.
1. The intro is way too long, in the sense that it's just a simple drum loop repeating for almost 1 minute straight, no build up other than adding a different instrument to the loop maybe every ~20 seconds.

2. Are you using the (if you are using Fruity Loops Studio) basic vst plugins for FL Studio (FL keys, wasp, two I believe you used in this track from 1:28, 1:43)? If so, I suggest toying with the effects and their 'knobs' to produce a better sound. Also, try adding chords to your melody in the piano roll. Another suggestion would be to look online for some free VST plugins, and there are some really good ones out there that can give a high-end producer sound.

3. Variation to the melody and beat itself.
I noticed that it's the same melody throughout the whole song, as well as the same beat (kick, snare, etc.) and you occasionally add in the piano. A suggestion for next time would be to maybe raise the whole song up a key or so, or tune with the notes a bit.

4. I like the bass in the beginning. It's a very 'punchy', powerful sound and messing around with it with some automations should make that sucker sound beautiful.

Hope I could be of some assistance, if any, to you and make your next submission even better!

Overall; well done and good effort into this piece.
3/5, 7/10.

Cheers,

dj JPA

Really nice!

I like the way you made the bass sound in the beginning. Reminds me of the first song in BIT.TRIP Void (the sound, not the melody). Anyway, it sounds awesome!