This came out well for a second creation. Well then now the instruments could use some fine tuning and a little more piano would be preferred. The rythm was nice just use more instruments and perhaps balance the volume maybe? Meh I dunno but this song just felt wrong somewhere despite it was well strung together. Your song also was saved and revitalized by the instrument that comes halfway through. I seriously aint knowledgable of song critique but this was nicely made so bravo.