i suggest not making a song based on going down every key one at a time...theres something called key progression and if you want to correctly fdo that without souding newbish than maybe you should learn composition.But at least you tried.
thanks for reviewing this, and I am looking for any help on the net or from people as to how to compose properly. I am shure that it sounds newbish but i am a newb so it is hard to not sound newbish.
This was a sub par piece There not much to fix here Maybe if you would slayered it then add some apperiageto(sp?) and maybe some better drums. It would be better. Until then keep trying.
thank you for the suggestion, i aggree on the drums. maby next time i will slayer then work from there.