yeah o.k ...
just speed it up a little add some bass and you'll have a rave goin. Seriously though this is good for a start add more rave. Use a less creepy voice it is kinda scary. Im guessin this is kind of a story thing that we have to assemble ourselves and understand its depth.
Oh my.. You understand everything so clearly! :D Yes, it's meant to be scary, and yes, you need guess this tiny story by yourself.
Thank you for the advice, I appreciate it! I will try to compose something, basing on your advice.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.