Really digging the rhyme scheme man. Some good stuff there for sure. As far as delivery goes, I think it feels like you could use a bit more excitement.
About the beat, it's good, but has some mixing issues. The drums need to be brought forth more into the mix mainly, and the lower end is missing in parts of the beat.
Still, great stuff
I like the entire song, the lyrics and the beat now i dont have any experience when it comes to putting a song together but maybe the bass could be a little deeper hard hitting or maybe that is how you wanted it but again the song is great overall
work on your style
let me just say your delivery is standard...nothing special....its like your just reading it off paper. Keep it up though, I'm trying to start rappin too, and i just cant spit a written out and have the same enthusiasm as speaking off the top of my dome while listening to a track. But your lyrics are tight.
quite good. i think.
i think this is awesome. (y)
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