Surpirisingly not to bad.
I read 'my first attempt' and think OH JESUS, but it's actually okay, you should try not to pile everything on top of each other too much, and if you, fix the volume. i would also soften the hi hat and snare. Great synths at times.
Sorry but being a critical person is not what im best at cause i dont like looking for every tiny problem. I can say its great even though it tends to get a tad bit repetitive at times. 10/10 5/5