ok ian you have majority improved. progress had been made it is becoming apparent now. but im actually not going to adress the orchestration in this one, for the most part it was fine. nice lead synth by the way. i will say at 3:48 though , it was a little off putting, came out of nowhere and changed the theme. i had no idea what was going on. i liked the vocal pads but this became something weird, lol. but very original.
uh, ok you mixing on this has got to do a few things. in the first half that kick has more bottom than my recent ex, i feel like it needs to be shortened so that some of that is cut off. because its muddying things up when it gets more intricate, maybe shave some off with an eq, instead of shortening.
at 1:57.... dude that sweep and then accented with the piano at the end, was just great. im impressed. very propper use of instruments there
your intro was superb.
at 1:40 though that synth comes in without warning and startles the listener.