Change the main synth
The main synth running through the whole thing is too loud, and raspy. It needs a more full drum sample, so some hat and claps in there, maybe another running hat to fill in sound.
A bass line would be awesome, some pad maybe too. (The one that comes in about a minute and twenty seconds is alright, too soft and drowned out by the main synth)
this does have a TON of potential, just completely under done. Needs a lot of stuff to it.
the main thing you need to do is add a limiter to the main master channel, that way nothing will blast over and burn the ear drums. Then you need to drastically drop the sound, and maybe change out completely the main synth used. Add a bunch more drum samples to fill in the beat so it isn't just the constant boom boom boom boom. which sometimes works, but not all on its own through an entire 3 minute song ;)
I say this to help you out, I am in no way bashing your work or trying to make you feel like you suck, because this could be really good. It is just missing a lot of key ingredients ;)
Thank you. I am always looking for constructive criticism. And I just listened to the song from this website. I was unaware the EQ was messed up. It sounded fine coming from iTunes. The unfortunate thing is that my PC crashed and I lost the data for this song. I have tried reconstructing it, but I have been unable to. Also if you want to hear my newest tracks you can visit my myspace: http://www.myspace.com/x-killanrg Also you download my tracks at either http://soundcloud.com/search?q[fullte xt]=x-killa or at http://www.soundclick.com/bands/defau lt.cfm?bandID=754487&content=widgets. I know my music is usually repetitive, but I am getting better, I think.