Would be a good beginning for something.

I'm no expert, but in my opinion if this were extended and a good melody put into it it wouldn't be half bad as a song - as it is it's kind of leaving me hanging. It's really not a song yet, simply an intro. An intro to what is completely up to you.

P.S. I'd try making your drums a little less repetitive. Maybe it's just because they're standing out as the only thing there so I'm scrutinizing it a bit too much =.='''