A little quiet
I'm not going to write this track off completely, but as it stands, it needs a lot of work to make it realise the potential it has.
What I would suggest is that you work with making this piece louder and more imposing. I know that the quiet pieces are there for a reason, but perhaps adding something louder would make them seem more meaningful. Either that, or adding it together with the other parts and not submitting a demo would help us to hear it within the correct context.
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