Started this in a late night drunken stupor, finished it with the intent on playing it for my songwriting class. Had to get a bunch of lyrics through stream of conciousness journaling.
Pay attention to the lyrics and not my singing(if possible). I know my voice is...well...yea
Here's what I came up with:
Amidst the mountain side
beams of light cloud my eyes(it's no surprise).
Legs fall like the finest wines,
Flowing though different phases of time.
Rain spawns from out of ice icy air.
Howling winds can lead anywhere.
Stop to think, and become aware.
Uncertainty is a powerless affair.
Stop to think, and become aware.
Uncertainty is a powerless affair.
Tell me what you think :D
wanted more
loved the intro and the whole feel of the song,the singing was distracting,, lost my focus couldn't concertate and the music,,I actually read the lyrics first,, the words, felt intense,I feel like they were talking to me,( I liked,stop to think, and become aware,uncertainty is powerless affair)
Cool, I'm gonna submit an instrumental version tonight
Hm!
I loved the intro sine-like synths--it conveys a very calm and relaxing atmosphere.
Ignoring the vocal factor, I really like the vocal melodies though! You may want to put in some delay on the vocals to create a more flowing feel? Just a thought ;)
The break at 2:25 followed by the synth "solo" was awsome!!!
But I agree with the previous reviewer, it feels incomplete and needs some tweaks here and there.
Overall, the track is very soothing and can actually make me fall asleep (a good thing) haha
sweet, glad you liked it.
I know this one needs some tweaking, as do most(all?)
Hmmm...
It certainly has potential, but for me it sounded like it's the Béta version of a demo.
What I liked about this song is the background music, it's smooth, calming and a bit gentle. But, as you said before, the song needs other vocals. Not that I dislike your voice, but it really distracted me from the message of your lyrics.
What is that message, anyway? I tried to understand you're lyrics twice, but it doesn't seem to make sense for me.
Anywho, keep making music.
yea, this song is in no way complete
The message involves the fog as a metaphor for being uncertain about things
Thanks!
(female vocals would work best, but does ANYONE want to record over this?)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
RyeGuyHead 
