Personally I don't like reviewing WIP's...
Let's see... It lost my attention, badly, like I almost fell asleep.
It's a very basic template. Like very very basic. Kick/Hat/Clap/Bass/Chord Block/Lead. Try adding some stuff that would make me say "hey that's bad ass", like automation clips perhaps.
I'm emailing you the song I was planning on finishing for you. Do you hear how after the vocals a synth sweeps in to almost "replace" the voice? and then I added some glitch effects and filtering to the voice? I also am in love with distortion, so i'm sure you could hear a lot of that.
The instruments you use tend to be mundane, and very Korg R3 Keyboardy. I don't even use a keyboard in my stuff xD
Maybe after you add your distortion and leads, it'll sound better, but I would
A) change the beat up
B) Change the chord structure up
C) Pick different instruments, or edit them
D) Be sure to choose a very "bossy" lead. Something that's in your face D:<!!!!
Oh and of course syncing needs to be fixed, but since you used a keyboard i could understand.
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