Interesting, but a bit boring
Hey, here's an honest review.
The vocal layers imitates a very indie sound, kinda "built to spill". However, the lyrics almost sound childish, as everything rhymes with the previous line and their not particularly clever, this may have been your intention for it to sound silly.
As for the music, the man may be on the move but the notes aren't. It was most likely your intention to simply pound out the same two chords for the verse, but it does get boring, the vocal layer might keep you interested but the lyrics...not particularly.
The bridge, and whatever made the effect, is probably my favorite part, it adds to the dreamy atmosphere, and it sounds very cool. However, the bridge alone doesn't save the song.
Overall, 7/10 4/5
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I was totally going for a goofy, silly song with a minimalist bent, but [in hindsight] it does seem to be a bit boring.