First off, this is a good piece overall. Since you want critique, let me list pros and cons.
Pros- The melody is just great! The bass line is pretty good, along with the kicks.
Cons - You should develop the beat better. Add hi-hats in between the kicks, u know, like the whole "boom chik boom chik boom chik" deal going on. At 1:00, it gets to like the climax, so you should have a very nice transition that leads to 1:00.
Also, a few more intsruments in the background, such as sequences, won't hurt at all. Also, add more to the structure like breaks and solos and just anything you can imagine to give it more flavor and to make it longer. Try aiming for something in between 3 and 4 minutes.
I hope this helped. I am really looking forward to the newer version if you decide to make one. Feel free to check out some of my new songs from this year.
Good Luck and Well Done!
- DJ Chilvan
I like it! :D
Nice work, but the bass is a little discordant in the beginning and certain parts through out the song. I liked your use of the gold saw. Especially at 1:00. This can definitely get better. Oh, you need more drums!!! Here's your score. 3/5 7/10
Also could you check out my new song called Driving to Infinity (Finished)?