Good Start!

This is a good start for a song, doesn't sound very finished though, sorry. I'm actually quite glad to see a so called "Trance" song on NG that isn't freaking anthem trance or just nothing even close to trance, this is a bit more traditional (not completely, but kinda). I didn't like the clap in the background at 00:30, it was a bit weak (to be honest I hate claps -.-).

The melody is quite good but needs more change throughout the song, after awhile it got boring. Here's a link to what's considered proper trance (this song is also considered to be what started trance):

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vw1QJg 4RYwE - Notice this one requires a good attention span (good trance does)..

Sorry if this is long, hope I gave you some kind of advice :D