hm

the phased lead that you use in the begginging, is really nice.
the beat is a little...too industrial andnot fullfilling enough.
The pad was really...REALLY ear piecing. i wouldnt call this too much of trance..its a mix between industrial and techno.
the strings were nice, but trance doesnt have breaks in it. the breaks in trance are supposed to define the break downs and build ups.
So im actually waiting for a nice build up.
it didnt really climax, cause it didnt have the climaxed feel.
Y'now, you needed to tone down the strings, and make a better vibe beat (traditional 4X4 kick with open high hats on the odd beat and a clpa every secdon beat.)
the you needed a really big sappy lead, to climax it off.
a lot to improve on (ive never listened to your music b4) but still really good.

great work,
theblackhawk--_--