Interesting use of percussion at the beginning. I like how you contrast the smooth flowiness of the guitar early on with the energetic and unique beats. The vocals are amusing, and the lyrics themselves are enjoyable too. However, I think it was really unconventional to pan the vocals almost all the way to the right, and you later do something similar with the drums at 1:45. I also thought you overused those open hats (i.e., :54 and other places) a lot, and it was a little strange that the drums were so much quieter during the first minute or so until :54. I couldnβt tell if this was a mastering mistake or if you simply wanted to create some sense of climax. If the latter is the case, I would suggest gradually increasing the volume instead of jarringly changing the volume like that all of a sudden. Thereβs also little sense of transition into 1:19, and you abuse panning a lot in this piece. After a certain point, it just becomes confusing to listen to. Also, I can barely make out the kick drum at all during the refrain (1:19). However, I appreciate how you varied the 2nd verse from the first one. It gave the piece a nice sense of development. However, the piece has very little strong melodic content, and is mostly constructed of repetitive riffs and a cliche chord progression during the refrains. I think you couldβve used a bridge or breakdown section where you strip away the drums and bass, perhaps using a climactic solo to transition into the second refrain, just to give the piece a sense of overarching direction. You also did little to vary the second refrain from the first. Overall, I enjoyed the powerful vocals, full texture, and intense drive of the piece. I think you need to work on transitions, mastering and sample quality, and progressing the piece to channel the energy more effectively. Until then, keep working at it, man. ;)
6.75/10
sapoman 
