I'm saying this to be nice...
You need to understand the elements that make up a good beat before you make a track. In some points you do put together a decent rhythm, like around 2:00, but often your syncopation is off.
The rate of the bass sounds you add do not match up with the beat, and though the beat does vary, there are no clearly defined points that mark the transitions between the segments.
Specifically, at the beginning, the beat is off from a natural rhythm.
You also need more sounds and different frequencies filled to make it a song rather than just a beat.
I hope this helps at least a little.
Thanks for the advice. I only made this because i was just bored with nothing better to do. But I'll take your advice to mind next time i try.