Here's some suggestions, man.
Hey man, I'm diggin what you've got goin on here. It feels a little more progressive than most of the metal songs released on NG. I'll tell ya what, your sound isn't half bad. The drums are definitely too loud, and the guitar is definitely too soft, but that's a hell of a lot better than it being blaringly loud and puke-worthy...as is the condition of most metal songs here lol. Here's a suggestion my friend, since I'm practically doing the exact same thing you're doing right now. I don't know exactly how you record, but by the sound of the ultra-compression I'm assuming you record straight into your computer somehow. Try this - mic your amp by the cone with a condenser mic (like the Audix i5, which is one of the most badass mics at a relatively low cost from what I hear), keeping the mic about 2 inches away from the cone and at a 45 degree angle with the speaker. I've heard the sound is more natural (although I have yet to test it =P), and it's certainly better than recording straight into your computer. Of course, in order to record with a condenser mic, you'll need some sort of a preamp, like the Firebox or something like that. The Firebox itself is a useful tool in ridding yourself of the obnoxious frequencies that typically lend your project to destruction (i.e. the annoying popping and fuzzing that tends to accumulate when you record straight into your computer). I hope this helps man, because this has the potential to go somewhere with the right techniques.
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