A little repetitive
I think that there is some good melody going to this piece, but unfortunately, there was very little done to actually vary the piece, so it became quite monotonous. I would combat this by throwing in perhaps a change of tempo and a more aggressive sounding counter melody to come in and break up the beat.
I think that there is a great chance to make this better, but it does need to be broken down to the constituent parts again, before going through a rebuild phase.
[Reivew Request Club]