I'm taking your advice and checking some of your other work.. This one is much better then the other... The vocals are a bit better (still not the best).. and the lyrics make sense. The production is also very nice, the melodies, beat, and other additions to it are very nice.. although, I don't see any true talent here... don't get me wrong, the song is nice.. it's just not perfected. On this one, I'll give u a 4/5 and 8/10.
thanks ya ya this isnt the best song i got, check out part of ur system, its the best and i wrote all the lyrics and produced it, im recording new stuff that ill put on here cause these were like my first real attempts at serious recording, they where all instrumental songs that werent made for any lyrics to be added, i just did the best i could to turn them into songs and im producing, also im 16 years old so i think for a first attempt its pretty good