that bass sound .. it members me of someone
that used to make music by its own, playe guitar,piano, synthesizers you call m..
but i forgot his name tho ..
anyways it wouldnt help you getting better right ^^
i think the melody on 1:12 could be lowered in volume,
and your kick could use some extraordinary compression + EQing :)
as for the clap towards the end could also use some lowering in volume ;)
besides that, nice version :P