It's a little snappy. Like at 0:16 you'll notice an "all of a sudden" riff. It needs more of a fade in. 0:48 stops way to soon. Needs a fade out and some notes need to be replaced.
Let me know how the full version comes out.
Thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it. As for some of the notes needing to be replaced, I get where you're getting that from even as I made it some of the notes sounded odd, but I didn't know what to do with them. Thanks for the review, I'm glad you were honest without being to harsh or too light. Thanks again.