COMPRESSION!!!

Dude I notice RIGHT AWAY clipping in your music... your making it go way above its limit... you need to learn how to use compressors.

I'm just gonna go ahead and say your using Fruity Loops. Dunno which version. But anyways, when u play music in FL, look at a double EQ style thing that has "Monitor" beside it... if either of the 2 bars go really far and turn red its way too much and you need to compress.

Now this song is pretty nice, since its ur first song you've submitted I'd say its a really great start! But you have to keep the clipping down!

Also I noticed you have 26 song's in less than a month... dude! Take it easy!!! Take the time to edit ur stuff and make sure its 100% perfect for what u want. For 1, people will like that you've taken the time to make it as good as possible and 2, if you continue at this rate people will turn a blind eye on you and consider you a newbie uploading every single thing u make... Just yesterday you submitted 5 times. Not saying u made them all yesterday but 26 songs in less than a month is too much!

Most people upload once every few days if they don't work on a project for very long. You need to step away from the comp for a while and come in and spend some time on your song here and there for a few days, and listen to some of your CD's and files in between. This will give you good ideas and help you see things u never saw in the first place. Trust me... taking some time away from making the song can be as productive as sitting their fiddling with it for hours.

Wow this is getting long. So yea, COMPRESS!!!

Good song too :D