So I know it was only yesterday that i had posted the first version of the song, but i wanted to give this a fresh start. I rerecorded most of the parts, except for the second "solo". The drums are better quality, bu my friend pointed out some issues that i'll fix up later. Oh and did i mention that the song now is mostly all in time. :P
What was used this song:
My Bass Guitar - (For Playing)
Plastic Bread Tie Thing - (For Pluckin, and yes i'm serious xD)
Riff Works T4 Demo - (For the recording)
Guitar Pro - (To tab out the drum part)
Fl Studio 9 Demo - (For the drum sounds/clarity)
Audacity - (To put it all together and final touch ups)
Oh and the part at around :46-50 where every thing stops for a split second, isn't intentional, but for those of you who listen closely, it stays in time. So yeah, tell me what you think =3
Edit:
Okay, I don't think there's much i'll be able to do with this one for a bit. So i'll just leave it how it is for now. Also this is my entry for the NG Audio Death Match. =3
Not bad!
Not a bad job. Overall structure was great. Intro was slightly slow to start and the chord progressions werent as smooth as i would have liked. However, guitar quality wasnt bad and drums were fantastic and varied. Could've used a bit more humanizing. Ending was nice too.
Darklight17
P.S This is your judging review from NGADM Round 1. I posted it for ya just cos its always nice to have more reviews.
Hey thanks man. Good luck with those reviews on the rest of the competition! =3
Well at least it attempts a melody
The bassline is not very imaginative, the drums are very samey throughout the song, although they were at least slightly decent at the beginning before dissolving into a giant mess. I am actually impressed by some of the guitar effects done in the early part of the song, which do appear to have melodic structure to them. Sadly, while I was hoping the song was off to a good start, at the first minute mark it sounds like you have no idea what your doing, and the whole thing is terribly amateur.
After this, things just start getting worse and worse and worse, as the guitar that was once melodic is now an offtune dying sound. The drums are also extremely questionable. All your drummer is doing is hitting a hit hat and then randomly hitting a snare drum. That's it. For almost 2 entire minutes. Meanwhile the guitar has been so incredibly distorted its barely even identifiable as a guitar.
Bad idea for an ending. It was a bad idea for an intro to start with, and to END the song on that kind of a breakdown makes it even worse. Since you just had a relatively slow section in the middle, you'd want to at least climax the song instead of letting it die. As a side note, you don't sound like you know how to play the guitar well... but at least you didn't overcompress everything to the point of absurdity.
4/10
3/5
I would have probably gotten more out of a review that just said "Sucks" than this. There was nothing honestly helpful about this. I'm glad you can point out that I'm terrible at the guitar, that REALLY helps me learn more and build upon my musical knowledge. (Feel that sarcasm)
Also where are you hearing this random snare, no where in the song does the drum part hit random noes. Maybe a lot of off beats, but not random.
Where you trying to help me, or just point out the bad parts? You've pointed out some parts that are bad, but then don't really say anything useful. Same goes for the decent to good parts. And i've noticed this on some of your other reviews.
So please, next time you review something, try to actually help rather than just give an elaborate version of a "This sucks" Or "Oh I like this" review.
This is pretty awesome!
This is a really nice song you got here.
Although i think the sound of some of the crashes could be better, quality wise :p
But yeah, it's just a really nice song. What a generic thing to say, but i can't think of anything else xD
Also, normally i'm not really into metal, but i can enjoy this. I like the riffs, 'specially the main motive (starts at 00:16) that keeps stuck in my head.
Good luck in the deathmatch!
Note to self: organise a deathmatch fight.. with pillows.
9/10
5/5
MH16
Yeah, the drums seem to be my problem on most of my songs. I tried to find the best sounding individual sounds for the drums as i could with the demo.
Oh and be careful, pillow fights her get dangerous! =P
Definately has an ambient feel to it.
But it still gives the feeling of wanting to headbang.
There's a point around 1:05 that feels a bit off, but after listening to it again it sounds right.
Generally, it's a good metal song that's calming, but yet headbang-worthy. Good work!
8/10
4/5
Good luck at the NGADM!
Lol hey thanks, and good luck to you too. =3
hehe
I am sure you will make it to next round. Not so sure about the others who already posted (:
Haha thanks.
Though there still are like 20 others who have to put up there submission lol So you never know =P
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
Kirbyfemur 
