Old Skool Rave
I think that you've taken too much time to fade in the melodies here - they are too quiet and can't be perceived properly over the rave style beat that you've got going to proceed them.
Perhaps consider just dropping them in with a phase change, so that one minute they are there and the next, they aren't, just hitting us with it. It's a good start to consider doing something like that.
When you get to the quieter phase at about 2 minutes, the melody fades in nicely as a counter to what you've already got working there and then as it continues, there is a tangible sense of progress here. It works well and towards the end, I even get the feeling that if you took "The Shire" from Tolkien's works forward to a more modern setting, this would be what the rebellious young Hobbits listen to, much to the disgruntlement of their elders.
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