This melody would be great for an introduction or opener, as said below. But as a main melody? I don't think so. There is a great song that can come out of this, if you add on to it with a super energetic beat and some synth. Right after that, I think it would make a good song. Now, try to come up with something else and see if it goes well toghether. Good luck!
8, just because it's alright as an opener but you left me wanting more and i can tell this has a great song hidden within it. very good, hurry up and make the rest of it =P