Unorganized

This song was really unorganized, that was it's biggest problem.
The simplistic style in the beggining gave a real horror feeling to it until 0:40. What was too bad was the fact you used that asian instrument, because in my opinion it didn't go at all with the rest of the song with it's horror/industrial sound.
Honestly, the song really isn't that great, mostly because it's kind of mashed up, and certain instruments should be reviewed by you in my opinion. So I'de suggest working on organizing it better.
I think the scene goes better with the 40 first seconds of this song, but it's probably not that bad with the rest, you tell me:
Pacific ocean 22:57 P.M.
Onboard the "Wander" cargo ship
One of the crew members wakes up on the floor of the ship. He stands up, looks around, he's all alone. Where are all the others? Why was he asleep on the ground? The ship gently rocks back and forth. Most of the lights are off.
He walks around, calling out to see if someone answers. Nothing. He keeps walking around. He goes torwards the dormitories, hoping to find someone. Upon arriving there, he checks the rooms, nothing unusual. But when he arrives at the last one, he switches on the light, and sees blood everywhere, splashed on the walls.
He stands back, frightened, and runs away. He keeps running, but all of a sudden a tortured scream can be heard. He stops, frozen. It came from the engine room. At that moment, he could have taken one of the lifeboats and go away. No he SHOULD have done that. But instead, he goes torwards the dark engine room.
He opens a trap and goes down. He arrives inside, its all dark with rusty machines everywhere. He slowly walks past the first couple of loud machines... That's when he sees the crew. On the ground. In bloody pieces. Making the entier room blood red. He hears a clinging noise behind him, behind one of those dark machines. He slowly turns around. The last thing he sees, is something jumping on him while letting out a horrible ear bleeding screech.
Was it some beast, that was hiding there all along? A sea creature that came on board? Or perhaps a crew member gone mad? Or maybe was it all a simple nightmare? Even I don't know...

GX3