It is promissing!
I Think the beginning is is wonderfull.
The baseline relly works with the drums but at some point there are pushed a bit backwards Be the high noted theme Probably due to overall compression and that is a shame. The bass drives the beat in this on making them less important in the latter stages is a shame.
Rather give it a more prominent role. Seperate Compression on the bassline will do it good.
Further more work on the drum compression the hihats and snares or on top of it all It need that pumping and suction sound that DANCE and House has.
I would use the Hight note theme in brakes and bridges if it stays like it.
Or play with a counter theme with them so tit envolves in more intresting melodic kind of thing.
But not to much melody please just a counter effect.
If you would want a melody in here places to but it is in brakes.
And keep the main parts rythmic and slightly monotone. That is the parts where people want to dance and get into the rythm.
Good start finish please!
peep me when done!
BTW great effects in the beginning good foor breaks and bridges as well.
The second effect lower in tone ends a little to late.
i will definetly work on it