Not gonna be a dick like the fella below.
I will however be honost. Your mic quality is horrible. I can't tell anything that your saying. Congrats on the instrumental but thats really all i can say is good. The vocals just hurt the song in general. Need to get a better mic. Perhaps someone to sing for you? (Trust me we can't be perfect at everything). Keep on the music and good luck on your next submission.
you sound like every "rock" band on myspace
haha dude were u drunk while u recorded vocals hahaha