I guess it's not exactly bad, but it doesn't click too well with me. But you do a nice Techno beat in the first half of the song, especially at 0:38. Also I like the 8-Bit'y sounding melody sequences.
But most of the other instruments do not really sound too great. The strings most of all. Maybe you could save a little bit with them if you'd make them less loud and gave them a lot of echo/reverb, but in general I'd just go with another string instrument.
Anyway, continue making tracks, and maybe focus a little more on your pretty good Techno beat that you have at display and try to support its rhythm more. Then it may even become quite danceable Techno!
Thanks, I'll try that out ^_^, I think I'm gonna mess with 8-bit sounding clips for a bit, should be fun.