Too bad it's already been zeroed..

This is a good attempt. Individually, your 23 patterns are probably pretty strong. However, that number in general is not typically what you want to be focusing on. Rather, the flow of your total music..

This is less commonly stated in most trance, but a definite beginning, middle, and end pattern still applies-which you do have. However, the middle sections did not have clear cut or innovative transitions. [I know this is hard with FL which is why I don't always use it] but adding in maybe a 3/4 measure every and then, or having NOT always 4 measure segments would be interesting. The best composers are the one's who have broken the rules [in good ways, obviously].

Also, towards 1 minute in there were too many clashing lines, which is probably why some of the voters gave a ZERO right away-they probably assumed the song would continue just adding in each of the 23 patterns-which is not the way u want to go really(i know you didn't do this I'm just saying).

Anyways-probably rambling. but good luck on the next one!
And also please check out my recently added "River Flows REMIX", however it is a first edit written by me literally 2 or more years ago and I'll be starting the 2nd edit fairly soon.