A bit repetitive but it was still pretty good.It did sound a little like you had to much treble though.If you cleaned up your tone a little bit and added a couple of extra bass lines it would be better.Good job.
I'm with Theblackhawk here. You should check out Ryan Martinie from Mudvayne. He is the metal equivalent to Flea (Red Hot Chili Peppers). The bass riff is repetitive to the bone, the song isn't very diverse, but I liked it.
I think when you raise the pitch to match the key change, it doesn't sound the greatest. Also, sounds like your strings are messed up, or you have the treble up way too high, and when you play the interlude part it's not in time with the rest of the song. Just my critique of the song, which isn't a bad one at all. Just a bit of sloppiness on the bass
I like the drums, good bass riff, but i would make the bass picks a slap, and not a finger pick. It's more heavy-mettalish. If you konw what i mean. but good job all the same.
If you want some GOOD pointers and people to learn from, the bassist of Mudvayne is very good, go to www.mxtabs.net to find his riffs, i've tried to play them, i eventually got them, and i learned alot.
If your wondering this is blackhawks bro, he doesn't play bass, i do. lol.