I find it hard to criticize music when i have very limited knowledge about this matter, but i do enjoy music that tells a story and i truly believe that this composition tells a very visual story.
it starts as the dark clouds moves closer to the town, and eventually blocking out the sun. First droplets of rain begin to fall, then the shower starts, people start to rush home, stores closing down. Then we see a young boy in a house staring out side his window, watching the rain drops on the puddles making music. then the young boy dressed in his rain coat, runs out side, and starts to dance/play in the rain.... and it ends with the clouds moving away from the sun and a rainbow forms in the distance.
it is truly a very beautiful piece, keep up the great work.
I think the biggest problem with this is some of the choice of instruments you used. I think givin the right instrumental work on this that this song would shine rather brightly, however some of what you have working on this kind of hurts. Your highs are slightly too high. Its a good concept for sure just needs a slight bit of work. Its still a decent listen =) So keep it up!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.