Intro is superb, but the melody...
Honestly I was blown away by the first 37 seconds of it, but when the main melody was introduced, my dick went kinda limp. It just didn't seem natural to the buildup, it sounds too Middle-Eastern as a friend described. It just didn't appeal to us.
The best suggestion I can give is to use the intro and take a more hardcore trance/rave approach. Also, the backtrack throughout was very goodly, it's just that melody that's driving me nuts.
All that aside, solid work bro. Hopefully you can release a "variant" for this sometime in the future.