this was pretty good, the only thing that i could say that i think needs to be changed is the intro, if you had it where it played the drums a little bit more, and then had the melody fade in like 3 seconds after, the end wasn't too special ether. but i think the melody was great, for me, i always have problems coming up with melodys, yours made it sound like it was from a flash game. keep up the good work, ill come back and listen to what you have later next week.
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