Sorry mate.
I am going to equate you to the Timbaland of Ng; and that's not a good thing. Like the famous producer in question, you really didn't bring anything new to the track... A new rhythm track, and a few minor fades aren't cutting it... Perhaps I am a bit biased, because I adore Akira's work on the Silent Hill 2 soundtrack, but I still stand by my observation. It seems, you should dissect the track more - and find ways to work in your own flair; instead of pasting a novel drum beat over it. Best of luck.