This is a very interesting first submission. There are a few parts of the song where the beat feels like it's not fit perfectly to the rest of the song, and the samples you used, like the "You know what?" hehe that's funny that you used them from Fruity Loops. It's easy to tell that you use FL. However, when the song is in a groove and not kinda being weird(like the second half) it's pretty funky and not bad at all. Keep it up, and try to keep the entire song in the same key. In the forums, in the audio section there are lots of tutorials under the stickied topic "New to Audio? Click Here!". Check that out and I'm sure you will pick up lots of great tips that will help you.
thanks man the forum kinda helped but not as much as i hoped it would.
i love your music and am Glad u took the time to listen to my crappy song it didnt take long to make.
Just need to blend in some stuff,caz it seem werid all a sudden that some rythem came in n then gone but over cool
Thanks for the tip.