Well, I can feel where this is going, but it just doesn't really have that whole Metal vibe. For example, whatever was used as a guitar (that IS a guitar, right?) did not fit in, and seemed more tuned to an 8-bit boss battle. Judging by your previous submissions, though, I guess that's more or less the idea. :)
Another thing. Every now and then there was a brief pause, which irritated me a little bit. Maybe it's because I'm a metal-head, but I prefer to listen to a song non-stop.
Overall, this has good potential to sound bad ass, but I'd reccomend a music maker thats more suited to the Metal genre in the future.